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“小xiǎo歌gē手shǒu,唱chàng儿ér歌gē,一yī唱chàng就jiù是shì一yī大箩luó......”从cóng一yī幢chuáng楼房fáng里lǐ传出来lái了le一yī阵zhèn悦耳的de歌gē声shēng。咦yí?这zhè首shǒu歌gē怎zěn么me这zhè么me陌mò生shēng,好hǎo像xiàng以前qián从cóng没听tīng到dào过,肯kěn定是shì这zhè个gè唱chàng歌gē的de小xiǎo姑gū娘niáng胡hú编biān乱造zào的de。“小xiǎo牧mù童tóng,骑qí黄huáng牛,边biān放fàng牧mù来lái边biān吹chuī笛dí......”小xiǎo姑gū娘niáng的de歌gē曲qū换huàn了le一yī首shǒu又yòu一yī首shǒu,她tā可kě真zhēn有yǒu唱chàng不bù完的de歌gē儿ér呀ya!

这zhè爱ài自zì编biān自zì唱chàng儿ér歌gē的de小xiǎo姑gū娘niáng是shì谁shuí呀ya?咱们men就jiù去qù认识shí一yī下xià她tā吧ba。我wǒ们men随suí着zhe歌gē声shēng而ér去qù,刚gāng走zǒu近jìn门mén口kǒu,那nà歌gē声shēng戛jiá然rán而ér止zhǐ。我wǒ们men从cóng窗口kǒu向xiàng里lǐ望wàng去qù,只zhǐ见jiàn一yī个gè小xiǎo姑gū娘niáng趴pā在zài地dì板bǎn上shàng,皱着zhe眉头tóu在zài苦kǔ思sī冥míng想着zhe什shén么me,可kě能是shì没歌gē词cí了le吧ba。突tū然rán,她tā脸liǎn上shàng又yòu露lù出了le微wēi笑,不bù一yī会儿ér,她tā从cóng地dì上shàng跳tiào了le起qǐ来lái,清qīng了le清qīng嗓sǎng子zi边biān唱chàng边biān舞wǔ了le起qǐ来lái:“,美měi丽的de小xiǎo蝴hú蝶dié,在zài空kōng中zhōng飞舞wǔ,快kuài乐lè的de小xiǎo精jīng灵líng将jiāng世界变biàn得更gèng美měi好hǎo。我wǒ们men......”小xiǎo姑gū娘niáng唱chàng了le一yī曲qū又yòu一yī曲qū,每měi一yī首shǒu歌gē曲qū的de词cí儿ér都dōu不bù一yī样yàng。她tā边biān编biān边biān唱chàng边biān跳tiào,仿佛fú是shì歌gē唱chàng仙xiān女nǚ下xià凡间jiān,完全陶táo醉zuì在zài自zì娱自zì乐lè的de无wú人rén境界中zhōng了le。

有yǒu一yī次cì,她tā把bǎ鸡jī毛máo掸子zi挂guà在zài胸前qián当dāng装饰shì品,把bǎ本běn子zi卷juǎn成chéng筒儿ér当dāng话筒,学xué着zhe电diàn视shì里lǐ明míng星xīng的de样yàng儿ér,跟着zhe电diàn视shì机jī里lǐ播放fàng的de曲qū调diào边biān扭niǔ边biān唱chàng了le起qǐ来lái,唱chàng着zhe唱chàng着zhe就jiù唱chàng歪wāi了le调diào儿ér。电diàn视shì里lǐ的de明míng星xīng唱chàng:“村cūn里lǐ有yǒu个gè姑gū娘niáng叫jiào小xiǎo芳fāng......”她tā却唱chàng成chéng了le“我wǒ家jiā养yǎng了le一yī只zhǐ小xiǎo花huā猫māo......”你nǐ说shuō荒huāng唐不bù荒huāng唐?咳,真zhēn是shì本běn性难nán移yí呀ya!

看kàn了le这zhè么me久jiǔ,又yòu听tīng了le我wǒ的de介jiè绍,也yě许你nǐ已经jīng知zhī道她tā是shì谁shuí了le。哈hā哈hā,怎zěn么me,你nǐ猜cāi不bù着zhe?嗨hāi!让ràng我wǒ告诉你nǐ吧ba,那nà个gè爱ài自zì编biān自zì唱chàng、自zì娱自zì乐lè的de小xiǎo姑gū娘niáng就jiù是shì我wǒ!

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